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A gentle petal on my skin, her kiss
drew out of me a shaky, wondering sigh
as lover-mine plucked roses from on high,
and blood-red lips bestowed their heated bliss.
Bent over me with fragrant skin and hair,
all tousled from our recent warm embrace,
she draws a finger 'cross my lips and face.
The sunlight glistens on her body bare.
Then all too soon, the day gives way to night;
too soon the petals fall and lose their blush;
it's gone, all gone; it's vanished in a rush.
And thorns remain, all cold and hard and bright.
Then, lost in shadows dark with cold and rime,
a final petal falls, entrapped in time.
drew out of me a shaky, wondering sigh
as lover-mine plucked roses from on high,
and blood-red lips bestowed their heated bliss.
Bent over me with fragrant skin and hair,
all tousled from our recent warm embrace,
she draws a finger 'cross my lips and face.
The sunlight glistens on her body bare.
Then all too soon, the day gives way to night;
too soon the petals fall and lose their blush;
it's gone, all gone; it's vanished in a rush.
And thorns remain, all cold and hard and bright.
Then, lost in shadows dark with cold and rime,
a final petal falls, entrapped in time.
I re-wrote an earlier sonnet to try clarify its most basic message, and to improve its use of imagery. In this case, the challenge was to use images and feelings suggested by the phrase, "a rose petal falls to the floor", and see if I could work that theme into my existing sonnet.
It took some major renovations, but I think in the end, the result is greatly improved. I am pleased with it.
It took some major renovations, but I think in the end, the result is greatly improved. I am pleased with it.
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Gorgeos... I love it...